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June 30th, 2004

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12:34 am - Here's Some Song Lyrics...
This is a highly personal song, although the audience probably won't ever get it unless I tell them. I put up a demo if you want to hear the melody. (It's a very rough demo...)

Any tips or feedback would be appreciated... I'd like to know how someone who doesn't know me would interpret the song.


The Boy You Love Is Dead

when you left him by himself
when you ran the other way
when you left him in his head
the boy you love is dead

when you walked into the house
when you wanted to wake up
when you went to sleep instead
the boy you love is dead

you think your man is dying as the blood spills on the floor
even though it looks like him it is a different boy

when you pointed to the sky
when you said your last goodbye
when you laid him in his bed
the boy you love is dead

you think your man is dying as the blood spills on the floor
even though I look like him I am a different boy

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Date:June 30th, 2004 04:32 pm (UTC)
the first impression i got was that someone (i'm assuming it's a girl, ha) broke this boy's heart and he ended up killing himself over it. but there's another boy who is in love with her too and he is dying because she doesn't see him? i don't know. i'm probably totally missing some crucial point. i really like it though. the rhythm and rhyme scheme make it flow very nicely.
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Date:June 30th, 2004 05:14 pm (UTC)
but boy you're dead and yr'love is dead but...
Date:June 30th, 2004 09:52 pm (UTC)

A child being hurt, causing the child in the person to be gone.

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Date:July 1st, 2004 08:27 pm (UTC)
Well, I've got to be frank, when I first read this I thought, "hm, nothing I haven't heard before". Then I listened to the music and the result just sent chills down my spine. It was very eerie-sad - like a good ghost story.
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Date:July 2nd, 2004 05:16 pm (UTC)
i like it, VERY different from what i've seen around. i like the tune also, its really cool. :)
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Date:July 3rd, 2004 11:26 am (UTC)
Thanks for each and every comment.

As far as the story of the song goes, as I look back at it, the whole story isn't there in the words. I think it's best to leave it as it is: an expression of pain that has changed someone deeply.

My main instrument is the acoustic guitar, and I spent most of high school playing bad folk music and writing songs that imitated my favorite musicians. I'm trying to avoid coffeehouse singer-songwriter land, but it's mighty difficult to stay away from the cliches. I'll post some more demos here in the future. Thanks again for all the help.


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